Discussion of "The Real Life" by UnknownEntity

good, i liked the lead up, i wrote a peice i can tell you one the same road i was, its all very relitize, more learn how to become imune to it, find it personaly imusing, the reason people dont like your writing, cause its the truth, people hate the truth, I must say you have to read "tropic of the capicorn, it is one of the greatest books ive ever read, you will laugh and cry...........

I'm liking this beginning. The only suggestion I'd make is to try to expand on Adam's conflicts and make them crystal clear to your readers. I'll be interested to see where you go with this one and how it develops.