Discussion of "Aricim: Prologue - A Trial of Dedication" by TornConcious

Great writing! And what thought provoking ideas !

Welcome back to SM. I love a story that has been carefully written, not burdened by the lack of proofreading. I'd like to see the action developed further. Your characters are well-developed but I'd still like to get more into their head. Thank you.

Thank you, really! I thought it was one of the better pieces I've written. I've missed SM quite a bit. If you have any advice I would be glad to hear it.