Great flow in this poem! i'm sorry to hear that things went the way they did. Sometimes people are too busy looking at something they forget to open their eyes. - ps You comment and read alot of my poetry! i wish there was some way to send you a message on here! id love to be able to talk!

Very nice, i like the flow, you should look at some of my poetry, im sure we can relate!

Thanks for commenting!!, i love seeing people relate to my writing, and keeping it positive.

I want to make a new chapter once a day, and i also want to make it a chose your own path story, (read it if you dont know what that means), but it will be a long road until i finish it, and i do want to finish it, so i just want your opinion, and i love feedback, thats what keeps me going.

Thanks

i hope to make this story very soon, and most of it to be his diary entries, thanks for the comment!

Nice work, i write poetry too, mine rhyme thought, you should check out my profile!

Thanks for the comment!

Well, i love writing, and you may not want to listen or use my advice, for am only 14, but be sure to check out my profile for some of my work, to maybe change your mind.

This is typically what i do to get inspired.

First off, i start with either looking outside
or looking into your past, or your heart

Really, i'm a poet, so i will be referring to poetry when i say this, Looking outside, can inspire you to write about something beautiful or it can inspire you to write about something you want to change with the world. Looking to the past is more of a way to write something about you, like writing about a recent event, -i just moved houses- so i could write about moving, in fact I DID!

Home?

The place i thought i knew, gone in a flash

The place built from memories, all gone in the ash

The ashes in my mind, of how i will miss this place

Playing with friends and seeing their face.

But yet again the place i knew,

lived and breathed there, through and through

through the days in the place i call home

For a home is only built off the memories

Memories that i will have to recreate

in a new place a new story a new fate.

As i say goodbye to this home

And i pack up these things to see the new place i roam

If only i could see what could become of this place

maybe a nice family will live here one day,

or just some people will come to tear it away.

whatever does happen, i wish i could stay.

Goodbye, i say.

I hope this helps someone.

-Aidan O'Reilly

word word is supposed to be world war

Thanks for your comment, and positivity, i really love this website, and i am reading your work right now!