To be honest, i've just been too lazy to do a final proof-read. Lol.

Thank you. I did this one in like 15 minutes. I was in one of those angry/horny moods. My friend actually requested that i write her a sex story, so I did, but just **** around with it a titch. Hehe.

Lol, no one has gotten it right, yet! :)

I hate how i can't re-edit things... Makes me feel like an idiot when i see those kinds of mistakes.

Anyhow, it isn't a woman.

Lol, well generally I do very explicit and morbid short-stories. Stuff involving serial killers and methodical torturing.

I rarely do raw and simple stuff. I got one or two short stories on here I did when i was in one of those angry moods.

Getting angry. Nothing beats some rage-writing.

Cool, thank you for the info!

"It never leaves your beautiful face, no matter what befowls your face"

I don't know how, if at all, i can re-edit published works, but i really want to fix this. Obviously i want to take out the second 'face.'

at 0-too early in the morning i wrote and hastily published two pieces of work. I figured that I could easily edit my work after publishing, because i saw "submit to reddit" on the bottom of the page... Somehow i read that as "sumbit to re-edit." Lol. If that what it really is, then I have no idea how to navigate that site...

Maybe i'm just stupid, but can anyone help me out here? Thanks guys.

lol, hey, i guess i like boots a little more than you ;) Muahahha!

thanks for the comments, though. The chapter i'm working on right now SHOULD be more like what ya'll suggested.

Well thank you for commenting!(somehow knew you would, heh!)

With the news thing, i was thinking just as you were, but never really changed it around to be more biased to the leaders and such. But it's good you pointed that out. As for the explanations of blocks(blocs), you're right as it should be common knowledge. Thanks again for pointing that out.

As for the time this is happening and the event that has caused this change in society/the world, i figure i'll be throwing information on those in the next chapter or something.(i guess that's one of the things that i'm not rushing into!)

lol, why did that "catch you in a loop."? Again, i'll be explaining more about the social groups and gangs in the next chapter.(social groups/gangs being more prominent in my story than in reality, but religious groups are also going to be explained as more militant as well.. So i figure i'll make my character not only a part of one of these youth gangs, but also as part of a religious group so i can really get into both... One of the main 'themes' i guess is prejudice and how it can affect the world)

Again, as you have said i want to draw out the explanation of this dystopian world i'll have the story set in. Throw in some bits of information here and there.

Writing an essay huh? could you explain that a bit...more in-depth to me?(just not sure how i'm doing that, and how i might correct it)

Anyways, thank you for the criticism. I'll see what i can do for my next chapter!