S_Ozdiyre |
Date Joined: April 24, 2008
Last Login: April 25, 2008 |
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1 Comments by S_Ozdiyre
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S_Ozdiyre 2 years, 4 months ago
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I find myself reading and seeing many different ways this could go, and I am very entertained with that diverse door. I like your descriptiveness and attention to detail in the scene; I pictured a dark restaurant lit with candles, but then the woman with the child threw me off. "Wait, is this a Denny's?" The errors are minor and not really worth negating a star. Very good work overall! 4 STARS! |
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1 Chapter by S_Ozdiyre
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2.8/5.0 - published Apr 24, 2008 - 1 comment - start of story (preview)
Wrote this from scratch in about 40mins. Buzzed on wine and tired as hell. I don't claim it to be at all quality, but I had fun, and I think it can branch out very well from where I left it.
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