Discussion of "What Have I Done Wrong" by Roguish1
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pammann 5 years, 3 months ago
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This chapter was very well written and I really enjoyed reading it. The only critique I have is that it doesn't fully continue the first chapter -I don't think Jared is the boyfriend, he's the boyfriend's friend and Johnny isn't the brother. (Though I think the author of the second chapter intially changed that.) |
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