really good. keep up the story and i'll keep coming back to read.

Hahaha! I love it! I had no idea what you were doing with the story until the very end! Great job!

She's committing suicide and she's drunk at the time [this is from Dostoevsky's "Crime and Punishment"], so I'm assuming that her thought process isn't really all that good. Still, thanks for the comment. I need the feedback.

I'm one to agree with Nate here. The story is excellent, subject matter included. All stories have elements in common [they're called archetypes], but that doesn't mean they're unoriginal. The story was well worded and had good emotional ties. Just because it's on a common subject doesn't mean it's not fresh.

To NateG, I liked your story. You have a good style and a good way with words. Ignore whats-his-name up there. You have talent. Keep writing.

By the way, if I hadn't known this was written by you but I'd heard the story, I would've assumed it was an actual belief on how the universe was created.

Really good! I like your style of writing! Your pace is nice and steady! keep it up!

one of the more grammatically correct pieces of writing I've read thus far. the idea is interesting, but Mary Shelley seems a little...overdone. nevertheless, it's a good start. keep it up!

despite sounding oddly like a recent murder case about a BYU student, it's a good story. Good, cliffhanger, but best of all, good writing style.