Discussion of "Harvest ( 2 ) Fat Billy Ray" by QuantasCylak

oops. autumn. guess i'll revise this to autumn when I get chance, but I'm spent right now.

QuantasCylak~
Excellent addition. Your dialogue was spot on. I was fully engrossed throughout and you left a terrific ending.
However…where is the FEAR FACTOR? This is supposed to be a horror story. Which isn’t to say that it still can’t be, but here we are now two chapters in and I’m not feeling the horror factor. Instead we have a wronged woman seeking revenge. Great premise…but not exactly terrifying.
Okay, enough of that. This is still damn good. Nice work. I gave you a five.

Damn! I’m a little torn about this one. I love your writing, you are really talented. My favorite line, “Empty cans of Budwieser were strewn haphazardly about the floor, like debris from a beer geyser, the epicenter of which appeared to be the motheaten plaid couch in the center of the living room.” I don’t think it leaves us with a clear idea of where the horror is coming from though. Is Billy dead when they find him? Will Maybel be haunted? Is he alive and coming for her? Still, the writing is excellent so I have to give you five for that!

QuantasCylak, I disagree with the comments about this thread lacking fear or horror. It is horrific in its realism. The first chapter is no more a horror story than this, and there is plenty of room to go on. I find it truly disturbing and horrifying. Completely believable, like it has actually happened. Absolutely fantastic. Every sentence is a piece of art. A horror story does not need the supernatural or a slasher. I hope I can mash this in a manner worthy of what you have accomplished here.

I LOVED your dialoge!! I could hear her in my head as I read along. Did she ever wash her hands before she opened that first beer??

A woman being raped is not counted as horror? I bet ya the woman that gets raped thinks of it as horror. Some of my greatest horror writers doesn't use monsters but use the human monster. I think this is what your aiming for. Good luck.