Discussion of "Flatline ( 2 ) Requiem for Love's delusion" by QuantasCylak

I finally got around to reading this one. Very well written, of course. I see what you mean about writing yourself in a circle. I think I would have ended the chapter at the single word, "Flatline". Although the rest is well done, I thought it overly long and... inconclusive? You did get to the "vengeance" point but...ummm, it didn't do anything for me because, for me, the chapter ended at "Flatline".
BTW...reference a previous comment you made. I've often thought of ending some of these stories but didn't because I felt it wasn't my place to. Second thought tells me that's not logical. If the originating author gets upset s/he can always "write around" the close as well as anyone else could. I finished one of my own stories, "Elephant Walk" more because I was tired of writing it (and the end clearly displayed that...lol) than anything else and then got a bunch of comments about ending it too soon...lol.
Having said all of that....sure, let's do it. Do you want to make a plan or just individually pick 'em?

Gah! I just can't match dogdeity's style! But I'm working at it. Its like he keeps this insane amount of tension in everything he writes, by purposefully being non descriptive. You're in someone's mind, things are happening, but you can't quite figure out what... so you really get absorbed, you really focus, sucking in every detail, every dash of humor or speck of evocative language magnified tenfold.
Then he slowly adds more detail, satisfying your thirst for knowledge of just what the hell is going on, and just when you're satisfied, the tension is drained almost completely... he throws in a gun, and brings it all back twenty fold!
How the hell can I match that? Where can this story go? I think thats why I wrote in a circle. I had no ending in mind when I wrote it. just trying to mimic DD's style. Grrrrr. Need to get dogdeity in a lab and study him.
As far as mashing some stuff out to the end, just let me know. We could take turns writing chapters or something and blaze through a bunch of these mashes! That would be a lot of fun. Plus, its hard to communicate through comments. I'm going to assume you got myspace. Mine's blueghostcity. E-mail me there until they come up with an easier way to coordinate on here.

LOL...what a great description of Dog's writing. Right on the money! So, I'm so much smarter than you...I NEVER even considered trying to match his style; a total waste of time...LMAO. I just kick back and enjoy the hell out of it.
I had a myspace account about a year ago, hardly ever used it and have now forgotten username and password. My email is lexallen@yahoo.com. Drop me a line and I'll be able to respond to wherever yours comes from.