Discussion of "October Chill: Emptiness" by Psycho1_77

hey dude...voted you a 5 earlier...just wanted to come back and say...'Awesome first chapter!'

Great job, there is a lot of detail, I can tell you put a lot of time into this.

Great job, psycho!! As honeygloom said, it's very apparent that you spent more time than usual writing this. I think we all chop/chop in posting here at SM, but you're "challenge" and the "contest" will change things with "October Chill" as you (and Nash, thusfar) have so wonderfully demonstrated. The end...shades of "Secret Window"....I enjoyed, especially. Here's a potential train wreck....everyone gets all fives...at the end it's all fives...lol.... I wouldn't want to be the judge or jury!!

Psycho - check the "Graph" thread.

I wonder who was on the news besides dinner?
Great set up!

You really put in double shift there, Psycho! I loved the TV segment (reminded me slightly of The Ring) -- very effective. Great job!

Two major errors: (1) You referred to a movie to aid in your description of a mood; (2) You ended off with a scene ripped off from another movie.

Your details are good though, and that's what spared it from getting a one from me.

what scene from what movie did I rip off for the end? no movie I've ever see, that's for sure...

This was well written. Very thought out...great leave for a mash. The ending you left I agree with you. I have never seen such in a movie...

Amazing line here Psycho:

"I was lost in memory. A time when the world was a bright place and I didn't reside in perpetual shadow."

Awesome!