Discussion of "The Talking Waves" by PrabeshChapagain

Wow so many good stories today from Prabesh, writerwannabe and theblackhand. This was really excellent. The setting is really established well. It was like I could almost feel the heat of the pizza ovens on a summer afternoon. Anyone who's worked in a place like a pizzeria where customers come in and out I think can understand what it was like for the main character. I guess what really makes this excellent is that the main character's strong attraction to the woman he sees is set against a grueling and hot day of work.
4.5/ 5

Thank you much for the comment...This was a first hand experience during the summer of 2005 while i was attending school for receiving my B.S in Psychology...I had initially thought who would like to read about the happenings of a Pizza shop...I am glad you liked it...

It really is a wonderful story...good plot.

Wow it's a great story.It remainded me of my days when i used to work for a pizza store
When are you going to write the second chapter?
I look forward to reading what follows

Thank you heartily for reading the chapter. I have the plot figured out, but i lack the time to continue. I have a day off tommorow, hopefully I will be able to write some more.

Thank you once again for reading........

Its very descriptive.I really got the feel of the pizza shop and felt as if i am personally experiencing it all.

---Ban

Thank you much for the comment banita. I appreciate it...

Hey prabesh!
this was a very unique kind of story and the plot was excellent. Keep up the good work man!

I have worked in a pizza place too. The story seem to exact happenings of a pizza shop.