Discussion of "To those with broken hearts" by Philosirus

Wow, what a wonderful little paragraph! Your use of diction, asonance and alliteration combine beautifully here!! The only downside I have is to the actual sentence structure. I believe that it would have been much smoother had it been typed poetically. But we all know how the wordprocessor on here can be :P. Other than that, good job, and cant wait to read more of your works!
NeoShaolin47

I appreciate that, really thank you. I enjoy doing this type of writing in prose form instead of poetic form to give it a bit of spice. =)