Discussion of "A story... not a poem" by OriginalSim

SMAC_MASH is evil

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No, you didn't screw up by writing the October Chill chapter... t's just that some people thought that you were trying to get involed in what we re doing or that you should be involved and while I love the chapter I was just simply stating that it wouldn't be fair to others if I skipped over them and involved you... as it stands, your great chapter is open to all to add to that are involved in this project...

hope that clears up any questions...

Nice chaper here, OS....loved the bit about "tears causing all that disruption"....touching.

Nice description, but I can't believe someone who was feeling so much pain would be too tired to commit suicide.

The key is in the paragraph above it: "She had dissolved into the surrounding area and suddenly felt a twinge of peacefulness."

I kind of felt that the peaceful feeling would take her to a different level. Maybe it didn't work like I'd hoped... perhaps I should have made it more gradual. Thanks for the honest comment, though. I appreciate it!

Poor Mariah. Dark, but there's alot to chew on besides despair.