Discussion of "The Ending Begins" by OriginalSim
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mari7789 11 months, 4 weeks ago
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I like your style of writing...very tongue in cheek:) I had to comment also about the profesions of your characters.wasn't there a song..."she was going to be an actress, and I was going to learn to fly" I don't know if that is why you chose those careers, but if you did I think it is funny. |
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OriginalSim 11 months, 4 weeks ago
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Not familiar with the song, but I wanted careers that were as far apart as I could think up in 10 seconds. Of course, it could be that I've heard the song and subliminally chose them.... Thanks for the compliment, too.... I'm blushing. |
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londonlil 9 months ago
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Hoping this one gets developed further. I like the style, how we're clearly drawn in from the very beginning. It'd be great to follow the travels as your hero makes his way trying to find Jilly. |
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darkmatter 8 months, 4 weeks ago
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mari7789, that's the Harry Chapin song, lol!! Yes and it has legs, good luck Original! I'm new everybody, which me luck. |
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Marykm 4 months, 1 week ago
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Wow, period. |
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Sweet_Beats 4 months ago
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Like the writing style. Do something with this. It seems to be going somewhere a bit predictable though... Your voice however is fantastic. |
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