I thought I kind of rushed through it a bit, but thanks a lot. I want to do more if I can get around to it. You know you're more than welcome to continue it also

Thanks guys. Yeah, this chapter is supposed to be kind of dumbed down. A mac-10 and grenade launcher is a highly impractical combination of weapons. I was going for that mindless bloodbath movie scene vibe.

thanks dog. there maybe be more, i'm not sure yet

Thanks for the constructive criticism, I definitely need it. It's been a couple of years since i've tried writing stories, but after stumbling onto this site I decided to start up again. So ultimately I'm a bit rusty. Again, thank you for helping me out

Thanks, I was intimidated by the quality of the first chapter, but when I started thinking about where I would take the story myself, I came up with this. Thank you for the feedback

Brilliant, I didn't expect that ending at all(like you need to hear that again.) I can see that I still have a long way to go as a writer.