Kudos! I think those are all ideas we would love to see implemented. Especially the voting issues, and the opt out. Another idea that was floating around, i can't remember who first suggested it, is to donate our "earnings" to a charity, that would be a nice option.

Oh I could only imagine! I lived right by the new Giants stadium. I guess that area had been really bad (South Beach, almost South of Market), but it had cleaned up considerably over the last few years. I love that area though, you walk one street over and it's a whole new world.

Very true, I probably should of expanded on that part, definitely an opportunity to lighten it up a bit. Thanks for the suggestion, I appreciate it!

RAD!! It's on, you know I can't resist this!!

I hope you don't think I'm trying to point out flaws (see my comments below). I'm just trying to give you meaningful feedback, we all have flaws in our writing! I think you're a talented writer my friend, if I didn't I wouldn't even bother commenting.

Jeez Man (I say man because I don't know your name yet) this is a really good story. I lived up in SF for about 6 months last year, right by the bay bridge in fact, I can picture the area when you describe it. Like I said, it's just a shame that these end up buried! They have to come up with a way for additions to be more visible. I really like your writing. Cheers

Sorry I haven't responded to these! They are very good my friend. It's a shame they end up buried as a result of the way storymash is setup right now.

This is really really good!!! You have quite the talent.

This is great!! First time I have read it, I really like it!!!! Sorry I haven't commented as of yet.

You have touched on so many concepts here, I almost feel like this story needs a prequel, to really bring it full circle, and to lay out the answers to the many questions. I like the idea of darkness, and that it is more than just evil. How could we measure kindness if not for evil? How could we appreciate the beauty of the light if not for the contrast of the dark. I picture a struggle for the very soul of mankind in this story. It has so much potential.