Discussion of "The Park: Eight" by MrLightening

This didn't do much for me. No real story movement, except that it seems Keith isn't going to sit back and wait a year. Could have been the beginning of the next chapter. Not so good as a stand alone chapter, though...sorry.

It was the beginning of the next chapter, but together I wasn't able to fit it on in the same sheet.

Uh...well, gee..uh, let me think...hmmmm.

You might try compressing, i.e. eliminating all the blank spaces between your lines? LOL