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Discussion of "The Air Within" by MrLightening


1 creativewriter 3 years, 2 months ago Reply

Interesting. Is this supposed to be a poem? If so, make the end of the word rhyme, but if this isn't... I'd like to see more. However, I kind of want to know more, unless this wasn't a story. Keep it up =)


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2 jazzfan 3 years, 2 months ago Reply

Um-m-m... Poems don't have to rhyme.

Excellent, Lightening!


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2 jazzfan 3 years, 2 months ago Reply

Great "moody" intro to the story. I'll reserve further comments until I've read the rest.


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1 MrLightening 3 years, 2 months ago Reply

Thank you jazzfan! Looking forward :)


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2 nailah783 3 years, 1 month ago Reply

I don't know about that rhyming poem part from creativewriter. Poems don't have to Rhyme, but I'm really interested to read more from you. I thought this was the perfect intro for me into your writing. Beautiful, well done.


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1 MrLightening 3 years, 1 month ago Reply

Thank you Nalia :) Looked at your FB page. Seems you take writing seriously ;)


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