Chilling, how calmly and sweetly Franco chided Adara.

Thank you everyone that commented, and I especially appreciate the pointers!

as to the 78 deg...it is pretty interesting to see the difference of opinion, probably based on the region where we live. Here in Florida, 78 is pretty cool, I freeze at 74. I have been to Nevada in the winter and summer, and they were pretty extreme (for me). Anyway, I just thought it was interesting, although, probably a detail that didn't need to be so explicit, for that reason.

One more time, thank you for all of the advice. I look forward to discovering the rest of the story!

This was hysterical! The POV argument was absolute perfection! I definitely look forward to reading more of your work...it was thoroughly entertaining!

Hi Darkkwind! Thank you for commenting!
I can see what you mean. I thought I was going for a more subtle advancement with Adara breaking down, but i guess it didn't turn out to be easily recognized. Are we supposed to correct errors and repost?
Thanks again for taking the time to comment, this is a really cool idea, and it is awesoem to see everyone so involved!

Hi expressionarchitect!
I appreciate the info, being so new at this!

New to the site, but really digging what I am seeing here. I read the previous chapters, and so far this one really draws the reader in. I didn't see your other versions....but I am very intrigued by where we ended up. Way to go!