Discussion of "Two Women" by Metzgermeister

This was so clean. I felt like it should have been dirtier. That's just me.
I noted on another of your works that I wondered what it would have been like if you threw caution to the wind and just penned what you felt, minus the constraints of structure. I wonder the same here. I felt like this had true emotion, yet was confined. Perhaps too well thought out. Probably get you an 'A' in creative writing class. Maybe win a poetry contest. But is it really how you feel?
Don't get me wrong, Im no poet. I just detest rules. I bet you could really open up and unleash a world of emotion if you let go of the rules and just poured yourself out.
My opinion. I still really liked it. great job.

Thank you for your comments, haha! I do restrain myself in my poetry quite a bit. I was taught to write poetry within certain constraints; when I write what naturally comes out of me, it tends to get really violent or really inappropriate, haha. Too many Stephen King novels, horror movies, and grudges held.

Bravo. :D