Discussion of "the suffocating head trip" by Maynardfan

three bullets- to separate myself from this world, hoping the other one is comfortable enough for me. i look down on me as i choke on the smoke from the weapon and i whisper 'feel better?'
....bloody brilliant! i wish i had an english aceent to make my comment seem more badass, mediocrity will suffice, making it more the easier to swallow. Foreign food can be hard to take, gagging and smiling as not to offend. Tell everyone in prose what the fear to hear, causing small brain orgasms and failures.

i didn't realize the power in that sentence...neato.

Wow - this one spoke to me immediately. After reading it, my own mash to your story came to me as they often do -- fully formed. Thanks for an inspiring read! Hope you like where I take it.

i rather enjoyed it, dear sir.

and omigosh, thanks for the comment, for sure!

i really enjoyed this. the debates of a sick mind.

a very sick mind...either way, all minds have free speech. it's boss.

This is a great story and thank you for the great comment for my Backspace story!!

One of the interesting things about this first chapter is the vivid visuals which both tell a "nightmarish" story as well as give any potential other writers a unique seed from which to draw from. Good job!

Yes! That's where I was going with this one! Thank you for 'seeing,' Finalwars.