Not a bad job, I like how you finish the 'detectivity' of the other story. It should spawn some great chapters from it. Kudos.

Thanks! Mary does seem to be overdone; I should have stopped the story when it said that I was looking into the face of Mary Shelley so that others could finish it off. I write too much sometimes...

Hmmm, I understand what you mean Doc. I reread it after I returned home from school, and it seems as though I overdid "Mary" quite a bit. I guess I seem to get too much into characterization sometimes without looking at how the character is actually acting. Thanks!

Thanks for the input! Dialogue is by far the hardest part when it comes to writing for me, especially with a pre-chapter that was fairly vague in defining some of its aspects (Tribunal, credits, elders, etc). I did like what Nan did though. Kudos to him/her.

I do not think that censorship is a necessity when it comes to writing, because writing is one of the freedoms that people et to express their own thoughts in, and it is also a good way to get a mood across among other things. Although stories don't need to be laced with four letter expletives every other word, I do feel that they can help convey moods due to the diction used, even if it involves cuss words.