All Comments by Marykm

This is a great story!
Very well told.

P.S.
Thanks for commenting on my poem!
I appreciate it.

Thanks for commenting and reading!

I like the description. Are you planning on adding onto it as a story or simply leaving it as is? I love the name- no hidden meaning, it is what it is.

the story comes from a chapter that i added on to behind the rainbow from luke

I like it!
It's really nice.

Sounds like a great plan! I look forward to this.

I enjoyed this very much! (By the way, thanks for commenting and rating on mine!)

It should be obvious to the readers, but if not you can do a few things. I suggest adding a comment to your work that says something along the lines of "this chapter was not intended to be added on to." Maybe at the end of your chapter you can add:
-End-

Oh, I'm sorry that happened!
I have to point out that 'too long' in some cases means the story isn't going anywhere or is drawn out in more detail than needed. You are probably right that they just didn't read it and didn't care, though.

There was music, it made a lot more sense with it. But I forgot how it went!

I agree with hebe.

I read the other chapter and this one and I am confused about a few things:
You say she still loves him-so what's with the divorce?
In the second chapter she is just meeting him or something. You never explained that.
You just don't describe things very well

it is a cute story....

Cute, but lots of mistakes.
Still, it's a cute story.

Again, thanks.
I will keep writing!

Nice writing!
I am wondering what will happen next...

Thanks for the comments. I appreciate such support!

Thanks for the comment!

Nice.
I don't know if I can tell where this is going, but I see that you wrote chapter two?
Well, keep writing. I like the use of an exceptional vocabulary and few mistakes!

I know, I was just pointing it out.
It's good.

It's great writing, the emotion comes on strong through an appropriate for the situation vocabulary.
I just don't enjoy this take on life, but it's still great. Keep it up!

this is excellent! I love it!

I have some chapters on my story and a few other new ones if you'd like to check them out.

thanks!
I'll keep writing and working at it.

thanks!

it wasn't the worst it could be, but i just don't think it was very well written.

Not bad at all.
Great writing, I understand you may not intend on making a story from this. If you do that's great too. I agree with shadinah, though. I don't know where this could go or where the title fits in.

nice if you have time i am a little bit confused on the whole harriet/anna thing and what happened to her/them
but great writing and original plot

sorry. I was having a bad day.
that eyebrow thing on the smiley was a mistake.

I thought about the same thing theblackhand did.
I discarded the idea, though.
Love it so far!

wondering what will happen next

but i must admit im totally lost

nice story! descriptive and fun!

It seems to be... Missing something?
There are a lot of mistakes, but I can overlook that. It has some potential. I think you should work on presentation of your plot and vocabulary.
Overall, I don't really have interest for one reason: the reader cannot see any climax or problem possible. But there hasn't been much written, so I guess we will see...

thanks!
I am grateful for the comments.

I lost most of this story, though. I was writing and it was turning out pretty good, then I accidently pressed a button and I lost the work.

The story was so realistic and somehow comforting. I am surprised I enjoyed it so, as I usually do not take part in reading or writing about such gloomy topics. I will try to write more for anyone who is interested in reading.
Please note that I am only thirteen. My writing can obviously not compare to some older, more experienced authors!

Wow, period.

Ok, you scared me! I was like this; <:-0 and :^/
But it was a great story. Unique and very dramatic (as much as if not more than you wished it to be). Now I have to look at all of the other stories!

Then again, if they are what you say they are, I better stay clear!!! (I'm only a kid)!

i didn't read the story.
but dude, WORK ON THE TITLE
you could make it better
>:)

I liked it, but it was quite grim.
I have written a few chapters if you'd like to read them.

this seems too much like a report

Thank you for the comment!

The plot is actually very interesting. I may want to add a chapter if you write a first one.

Thank you so much for taking time out of my schedule to read this. I will vomit and have nightmares for years. Childish ideas and fragments make up this story, not a plot. A disgusting misuse of time and effort from the author and reader alike was not needed.

It wasn't as well written as "The Piano"
That was beautiful.
It was fairly original and a very different.

It was a pleasure to my soul to read this short story. I love it, period.
(please contact me with any new stories like this!!!)

This is amazing writing.
This is the type of plot I would pick off the shelf and take home, the kind that I would sit there and read until my eyes popped out of my head!

I completely agree with Silver.
What was this piece?
It wasn't as bad as Silver may think, vocabulary deserves an okay, but... well, you know what I will say. It is choppy and has no base.

honestly, a long stream of words can hardly be considered art.
I am sorry to offend, but I must admit that this is the type of story that some guy writes in the middle of the night because he cannot sleep.

Hope you like it!

This is going somewhere, I PROMISE I'll try to make it more interesting!!!

Lots to read. I just recently finished a long chapter myself, and guess what? It's gone! I accidentally pressed the back button after I finished.

...good writing, but i don't usually read this stuff

Original, great vocab. Loved every word!

This is great! Although short, this chapter is descriptive and sweet. I didn't expect a turn like this, which makes for a great story (it is unexpected). I can't wait to read (or write) more!

I realize that this chapter was short and nondescriptive and it may seem hurried. this is because I am not even old enough to drive, and therefor cannot very well describe an insident related to a car crash.

good writer, but writing about this seems too hard for me to take. bad idea

It is open to anyone who wants to add on, which is wonderful. One bad thing is that there are many mistakes. The only other is that you didn't really go anywhere with the plot. Very descriptive.

I hope you enjoy this chapter. It is not the greatest thing I ever wrote, but it is something I worked on.

I must say that I, too, enjoyed the style of writing, but entire plot was something I had read before. The writing was quite good, but not original.