Well that was... mildly disturbing. A little rushed seeming though. Still I liked it. This isn't a one-shot is it? It feels like there should be more. One thing more: wouldn't the woman's tears make Terri more excited?

I actually really like this. I'm very interested to find out more about what's going on and what the nature of this world is that your narrator is talking about because it's a little vague thus far. That's fine htough since this is the first chapter and it leaves me wanting more.

Two bits of criticism though. First, I would not have realized your main character was male if not for the bit about his name in the beginning. He's a bit of a spazz. That's more of an observation though. Second, sometimes, it doesn't really sound like he's writing in a journal. It sounds more like he's narrating to the reader. LIke when he exclaims people. Does one normally do that in a journal?

Other than that, great job, I can't wait to see more in the future.

Hmm. So I read the first chapter and now this one and I'm really wondering where you're going with this. I look forward to more soon^^.

Oh yay! Thank you all for the comments and warm welcome^^. I look forward to reading your writings as well.