Discussion of "Her Suicide" by LostinAZ

Are you okay, Lostin AZ? That's a very nice story you have there. I've been on here for a couple of days and that is by far the best I've read so far. Good job. I just hope you're not really suicidal.

No I am not actually suicidal, I am however the person in the story and by writting it helps me feel a bit better. i do have a serious nerve disorder/condition that won't improve and hurts so bad that venting is all I have so I use this site to feel a bit better and not have to complain to freinds constantly. Thanks for being concerned. T-

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No I am not actually suicidal, I am however the person in the story and by writting it helps me feel a bit better. i do have a serious nerve disorder/condition that won't improve and hurts so bad that venting is all I have so I use this site to feel a bit better and not have to complain to freinds constantly. Thanks for being concerned. T-

Not a problem :) That's a relief, because you had me fooled. I hope you like my story mash on step parenting ;)

First of all LostinAZ, I offer my deepest sympathy regarding your condition, and want you to understand that the StoryMash community shall always be behind you!
Regarding your work, I think it is very good. I would make a few alterations, word choices here and there, and add more punctuation.
Also, splitting your story into a few paragraphs would aid the reading, as would the punctuation.
Other than that, I really enjoyed reading your work, and wish you all the best! x