Discussion of "The Best Revenge Part 2" by Linden

Is this ending a bit too cosy? I'd welcome other people's opinions.

I feel better about Amanda now. =D

Again, this was very well written. The dialogue is natural and smooth, giving us a clear picture of both of these characters. I love the line about nurture giving him what nature didn't - too funny!

I personally would love to see Jack's reaction to her renewing the loan. Showing kindness to those who have harmed you 'heaps burning coals on their heads.' For him to sit there and realize that when she has the opportunity, the power, to destroy his life like he did hers, but instead she chooses to give him a chance... That's going to be a doozy on him.

Again, well done! You're off to a great start on this site =D

Way too nice;)

Actually I like that you included this snippet of Amanda's home life, it helped humanize her. I agree with Aggeloi though, I think you should have drawn it out a bit, shown us their next meeting, show her stringing him along maybe. Which you could still do if you add another chapter.

Over all a very nice story though, well done!