Discussion of "PRPF~ Dr. Connor" by LadyLuck

Oh, what a mystery he is! Dr. Connor seems very proper and grandfathery. Seems like you've got a long way to go, huh? By the way, outstanding dialoge and story telling from the doctor, dkk!

Thanks, I'm glad the storytelling part came across as good.

Okay, I may of claimed you stole my idea, but you are hitting this way out of the ballpark, sis! Awesome job!

Thank ya thank ya!

Great set up with the scene, and the dialog is good. I think I need the chapters to be longer though. :P

yeah, I worried about that, but it seemed like a natural pause in my creative train of thought, so I left it until I dreamed up the rest. Thanks Hebe.

Great observations by the main character, well crafted. Damn good dialogue. Excellent bridging chapter.

Well damn, you're quick! lol Thanks for taking the time to check it out. Really thanks for not just saying something like 'it was good' or whatever. I'm glad you enjoyed reading it even if it may not be your 'thing'.

Sorry, I'm so late getting here, Lady L. I liked this chapter (better than my now aborted attempt to mash) but there were some inconsistencies that threw me off a teensy bit.

First - German. XXX. I initially wrote a lengthy paragraph about the German piece, but I think I'll simply say that it was far from "his German was superb". Also, what was said, doesn't fit in the story. Sorry, your bad luck that I'm fluent in German, I guess...lol.

Second - I was a bit confused when Dr. Connor started talking about "terms" and then, knowing things about the team that Rory didn't. Seems somewhat out of character that Rory didn't know the terms beforehand or that anyone would know more about her team than she does.

Well, small things, really. The story, itself, was smoothly executed and the writing well done! ;o)

Now I'm really disappointed in google translate! I never should of trusted it. Anyways, Dr. Connor knowing more, will present itself better as we learn more about him later on. He's very ominisent (sp?), and kind of like 'the eye in the sky'. And the terms were a suprise for everyone! LOL Rory didn't know because this was supposed to be a run of the mill assignment, maybe I didn't clue that enough. I thought it was clear, but oh well! ;) Thanks for taking the time to read it WWB.

LOL...I figured you had used a translator program. What stuck out the most was...you apparently mistyped the word "tend" with "lend"....because of that the doctor had guests "zu verleihen" lend to - rather "zu neige" tend to....;o).

Understand the rest better, now and looking forward to continuations...;o)

Yeah, we already estabilished how much I screwed up, LOL, so just go ahead and read the rest my friend.