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Discussion of "Chapter 2 - Prison, not so sweet, Prison" by LadyAdelia

1 writerwannabe 6 years, 11 months ago Reply

Ah, yes....this is the right stuff. Much, much better than the other second chapter. Fuller, more like chapter one.

I like the voice of the narrator, especially when she mentions "hindsight" type things. You've built both characters quite well...next, please! ;o)

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1 LadyAdelia 6 years, 11 months ago Reply

I'm so glad you like it. Thanks again, WW!

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1 cjbishop 6 years, 11 months ago Reply

Very, very good. Definitely can tell that by how much I'd like to get my hands on the imaginary a-hole. Can't wait to read more as the story unfolds. Did well portraying her innocence, teenage mindset, and rash choices we all make (especially in youth) in desperation.

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