Discussion of "One more night. (not suitable for children; this is highly explicit!)" by LadyAdelia

This was a fantastic read and also a bold piece.
Congrats

Thank you. I plan on adding more tomorrow.

Excellent erotica, Lady A! I really enjoy reading erotica that creates the visuals without the overboard vulgarity.

That's one point. The other story that you're setting up. Very well done. I'm looking forward to "tomorrow"...;o)

Please be nice and mentally insert "is the" between "other" and "story". Once again my fingers were not connected to my thoughts...lol

Thank you, WW! It's my first try. Re-reading it, I think it could use some flushing out. It needs more of something. I'm off to try my hand at chapter 2. :)

I like the way you are experimenting with different thread directions. Excellent dialoge and action descriptions. As you develop the main character, consider her voice. As I read her in this chapter I sense someone older than 14, while another chap seems dead-on at 14.

Sublimation?

Where do you get all these ideas yaar, from? Fabulous. You are a great creater.