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Discussion of "A long walk back" by LadyAdelia

1 writerwannabe 7 years ago Reply

This is really excellent writing, LA! I read your first two entries after joining the site and then...for some reason...missed everything until now. A situation I will quickly remedy...;o)

I really liked the story here and the main character's voice. Very descriptive, "real" and visual. The details, down to the Sheryl Crowe lyrics to her thoughts immediatley following the crash. Loved it!! ;o)

The fact that you avoided the standard "light at the end of a tunnel" was very well done. Can't wait for the next chapter!

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1 LadyAdelia 7 years ago Reply

Thank you! I will add the next chapter soon.

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1 JD_Renaissance 7 years ago Reply

Not bad, LadyA. There was a tense change midway that made things a bit confusing but otherwise well done. Love the visuals and your character's voice. I look forward to seeing where you take this one. Again, well done. :D

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1 LadyAdelia 7 years ago Reply

I don't know why the tense thing is such a struggle for me but it really is! Thank you for your great feedback! :) If you read the second chapter, let me know what you think. I'm feeling very uncertain about the dialogue and could use some hints. ;)

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