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Katrina

Date Joined: April 2, 2008
Last Login: Oct. 12, 2008

10 Blog Entries by Katrina

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1 Katrina 1 day, 3 hours ago Context

Hi there!

You can absolutely still enter!

All you have to do is click on the "Contest" button on the right hand side of the webpage. That will take you to the previous nine chapters of the current contest. Simply read those and get caught up, and then if you want to take a stab at the final and tenth chapter, start writing!

To officially submit your chapter for consideration, click on the ninth chapter and then "Write Next Chapter." Once you hit "publish," your chapter will be entered in to the contest and will be viewable from the Contest page.

If you have any further questions, shoot me an email at katrina@storymash.com.

Thanks!


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1 Katrina 6 days, 15 hours ago Context

Hi there!
All you have to do is click on the "Contest" button on the right hand side of the webpage. That will take you to the previous nine chapters of the current contest. Simply read those and get caught up, and then if you want to take a stab at the final and tenth chapter, start writing!

To officially submit your chapter for consideration, click on the ninth chapter and then "Write Next Chapter." Once you hit "publish," your chapter will be entered in to the contest and will be viewable from the Contest page.

If you have any further questions, shoot me an email at katrina@storymash.com.

Thanks!


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2 Katrina 1 week, 3 days ago Context

The tenth round is what is going on right now. Get your submissions in!


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1 Katrina 1 week, 5 days ago Context

Hi there!
Simply go to the "Contest" page and catch up on the nine chapters that make up the story. Then, if you want to enter round ten, simply mash the ninth chapter (http://storymash.com/u/Aggeloi/verinihu/) and you are done! The top ten ranked chapters will then be eligible to win, and our judges will announce the winner when the contest is completed.


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1 Katrina 1 week, 5 days ago Context

Hi there and welcome to SM!
Simply go to the "Contest" page and catch up on the nine chapters that make up the story. Then, if you want to enter round ten, simply mash the ninth chapter (http://storymash.com/u/Aggeloi/verinihu/) and you are done! The top ten ranked chapters will then be eligible to win, and our judges will announce the winner when the contest is completed.


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1 Katrina 1 week, 6 days ago Context

Sorry guys--I just now saw this post. The ninth round is closed, but keep in mind that EVERYONE will have a chance to enter a chapter for the tenth round. So start writing!


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2 Katrina 1 week, 6 days ago Context

The way that you incorporate Charlie into Jimmy's plan is interesting. I do wonder why they are targeting Adara--the control aspect can only be believable for so long. There has to be something underneath that.

Your expository writing is great--very descriptive, and it flows really well.

"I felt a sick sense of delight at the glimmer of fear in his eyes." This sentence doesn't make too much sense to me. Why is he scared when he's got Adara in complete submission?

The POV shift you make is confusing. (I'm referring specifically to the scene where Adara is referred to in third person)

This is a good chapter--I'm just afraid that there's a lot left for the tenth chapter to explain.

Good job!


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1 Katrina 1 week, 6 days ago Context

Good job picking up where the last chapter left off!

Great writing style. Your dialogue is good, and your exposition flows really well.

I'm slightly thrown off by the revelation that Charlie was an abusive husband. I feel as though this kind of important details would have/should have been revealed in an earlier chapter.

While I appreciate the flashback, I'm not crazy about how Adara let her gift slip out to Charlie. I can't put my finger on why I don't like it. It just hit me the wrong way.

I wish that we had more history about why Dr. Lipscomb and Charlie are so set on freeing Jimmy from jail. We know that they think he's a gift from God, but we need more insight.

I am also thrown back by the fact that Charlie seems so willing to kill Paige if Adara refuses to help. I know he's a bastard, but that's just a little too nuts.

Good ending! I like that Jimmy is using Methra--adds a nice little twist :)


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1 Katrina 1 week, 6 days ago Context

Great job picking up where the last chapter left off!

I'm a little confused by Charlie's opening dialogue--has he been completely out of Paige's and Adara's lives this whole time? That seems a little far-fetched to me. It seems as though we would have heard more about Charlie being an absent father figure before now.

Nice! I like that Jimmy is using Charlie as an agent. I'm honestly just glad that Charlie isn't a "bad guy"--that would have seemed a little too convenient.

"...but I’ve put you back with her so that I can be with her again, and things can be like they once were." --Creepy!!!

I'm glad that you gave us more background about Charlie and Adara's relationship.

I'm slightly skeptical that Adara seems to know so much about anatomy. She's a doctor, but not that type of doctor.

Ew, ew, ew. I got serious chills when we found out that Jimmy has been stalking Adara throughout her life. So disturbing!

Overall, this chapter was very well-written. Great job!


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1 Katrina 2 weeks, 4 days ago Context

Thank you for answering that question, WWB!


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