KatofTroy |
Date Joined: March 15, 2008
Last Login: May 28, 2012 |
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59 Comments by KatofTroy
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KatofTroy 3 years, 8 months ago
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Thank you hebe6405 for the feedback. I have not been on here for a while. I will work on this and resubmit. |
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KatofTroy 4 years ago
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I was not expecting that you would explain it in the story, however just as you all have done here helps me a lot. This is different from my style of writing. I intend to read on. Thank you everyone. |
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KatofTroy 4 years ago
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I did enjoy, but I am new to reading fantasy fiction. So that is why I have lots of questions. I did read the others. Your stories are well written, I am trying to get a handle on this world of magic. I look forward to exploring more of this, so keep writing and I will keep following. |
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KatofTroy 4 years ago
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I was just starting to (seethe) about that when I sniffed...(oops, I thought the word seethe was supposed to have a space to make see the. Now reading that I don't know why I thought you meant something else.) |
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KatofTroy 4 years ago
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Could you give a bit more? The start is weak. |
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KatofTroy 4 years ago
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This has great potential. Capitalize ‘I’ when standing a lone. University should be capitalize because it is a place. Suggestion for this sentence: Proofread to avoid punctuation, capilization, and spacing errors. It may help to read your work aloud to see if it sounds the way you intend for it to. |
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KatofTroy 4 years ago
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I like the attitude behind this. What inspired this piece? There are a few misspelled words and punctuations missing. If you do whatever you please will you really go with the wind? Sometimes that causes us to blow away from what we want. |
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KatofTroy 4 years ago
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This could use a lot of work. In the beginning you said Dave was your friend then later you say you never really liked him anyway. Proof read your work to avoid punctuation, capitalization, spelling, and sentence structure errors. Enter dialogue on different lines to show your speaker has changed. Question is Dave now a talking head? |
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KatofTroy 4 years ago
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Not able to figure out what you are trying to say. This is difficult to follow. |
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KatofTroy 4 years ago
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This is interesting that the widow slayer would honor a wish for him to go away. A few suggestions: |
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9 Chapters by KatofTroy
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3.2/5.0 - published May 08, 2009 - no comments - start of story (preview)
Three weeks left til school is out. Ms. Smith squeezes the walkie talkie, "Ms. Smith to security!, Ms. Smith to SECURITY!"
Tags: drama |
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3.4/5.0 - published May 08, 2009 - 1 comment - start of story (preview)
Maybe I should not have mailed it. I hear you’re in the Air Force and that you’re living a fine life...a boy for you, and a girl for her...
Tags: drama, suspension |
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3.4/5.0 - published May 07, 2009 - 1 comment - start of story (preview)
I can’t believe I am even responding to this. I thought, actually at that time that we were okay and that things were settled. You were so selfish...
Tags: closure |
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3.3/5.0 - published May 04, 2009 - 4 comments (preview)
After nearly 20 years of failed relationships Kat realizes that she never let go of a teenage love affair. She needs closure. What will Jay do in response? will she even be able to locate him?
Tags: closure |
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3.1/5.0 - published Mar 19, 2008 - 1 comment - start of story
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3.3/5.0 - published Mar 19, 2008 - 1 comment
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2.9/5.0 - published Mar 17, 2008 - 1 comment - start of story
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2.8/5.0 - published Mar 17, 2008 - no comments - start of story (preview)
This is different path for thought. This could happen.
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3.6/5.0 - published Mar 16, 2008 - 2 comments - start of story
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