Discussion of "What Creeps While You Sleep (Chapter Two): Where is Hank?" by KarishaPrescott
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VinnieP 4 months, 1 week ago
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Nice twist there. A little slow in pace but good nevertheless. Also, I found the constant change in tenses a little too distracting. |
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KarishaPrescott 4 months, 1 week ago
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Thanks for the feedback. I am always looking to improve. |
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writerwannabe 1 month, 2 weeks ago
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Now we're getting somewhere close to the title..lol. This one did drag a bit, very long conversation with Hank; but, it did establish both characters quite well. Continue? |
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hebe6405 1 month, 2 weeks ago
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The change in tense is distracting. The story is becoming interesting however. |
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