Discussion of "What Creeps While You Sleep (Chapter One): When Arizona meets Florida in the Summer" by KarishaPrescott

with your title I feel like I am missing so much more of the story you have to tell, please continue and I will keep an eye out for it.

Thanks!

Interesting premise. Apart from the few typos, I liked it. Starts of as a sweet story..but your title seems to hint at something else. I have to read the next chapter now! :)

Very innocuous beginning for a title like this one...lol. Does the next chapter get deeper? We'll see....;o)

Watch your tense closer - is/was... That was a little distracting. It has a nice build up of scene and the characters come across realistic. Some of the sentences need to be cleaned up.