Discussion of "Presence: Threshold Chapter 2" by Jakespeare
JD_Renaissance 3 years ago
This will sound terrible, but this is the first I've noticed anyone had continued this piece. First off, this is fairly well done - a few typos here or there, but you really set the scene. The dialogue could use a bit of tweaking, however, dialogue is a difficult aspect to conquer. Thank you for adding a continuation to my start chapter. Well done.
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Jakespeare 2 years, 11 months ago
Thank you, I can't tell you how much I appreciate the constructive criticism. I am new to the world of online fiction, so it is good to know that there are more experienced authors willing to assist and teach me as I grow as a writer.
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