Discussion of "Love and Bones, 2" by Jackoalltrades
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honeygloom 3 months, 4 weeks ago
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Ah, lovely! I'm so happy you mashed this. Nice work on the accents. I can never write them well, but you did a great job. And the last two lines are so perfect:) |
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writerwannabe 3 months, 4 weeks ago
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Good job, Jack. I'm not so sure about the accents...lol, but the rest of it was solid. |
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theblackhand 3 months, 4 weeks ago
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Nice mash JOAT.... |
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Cheeseliker 3 months, 3 weeks ago
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Decent continuation, but after reading the first piece, I didn't feel the accent there, and then in this piece, its almost jarring how accented it is. Took me out of the story, and for me, didn't work with the characters I had in my head. Other then the accents, it was fine. |
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cnd140 2 months, 3 weeks ago
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It is difficult when both lines of a story are this good. I liked the visuals, and enjoyed the dialog accent, but when it was just description I would have liked regular verbage. |
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