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Discussion of "The Price of Pride" by Jackoalltrades


1 dkk4510 5 years, 9 months ago Reply

WOW! Incrediably imaginative way to take this! Excellent work!
I'm so happy you signed up for my challenge, this was awesome!
I was totally thinking some monster, or ghost thing was gonna come from this, but the way you went was brilliant! Great job!


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1 djinndarme 5 years, 9 months ago Reply

You continue to impress, Jack. Great job with the challenge. Were you left unscathed? :-)


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1 Jackoalltrades 5 years, 9 months ago Reply

I'm a romantic. I am never unscathed. It provides me my inspiration.
Of course, I might just be a little crazy, also providing me with inspiration.
Pick your poison :P


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1 writerwannabe 5 years, 9 months ago Reply

Fantastic, imaginative writing Jack! I was really into this until the end..when...I..uh.. realized that I...mmmm, geesh this is hard to admit...didn't get it...ugh! Maybe it's a low IQ or maybe I'm just tired, old or a combination of all three, but....damn, I liked this. I just wish I "got it"...;o(


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1 Jackoalltrades 5 years, 9 months ago Reply

I had a friend read it and they had the same problem. It's supposed to be that the main character suffers nightmares from the destruction of all he was and the rescue workers have nightmares from the crazy near-dead guy. I left how he became an ethereal voyeur up to your imagination.


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1 writerwannabe 5 years, 9 months ago Reply

Ah...well, I thought that the destruction of his clothes represented the destruction of his pride. I guess my imagination, usually quite active and vivid went on vacation (at least at the end)...lol.
Thanks for the explanation... ;o)


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1 hebe6405 5 years, 9 months ago Reply

Magnificently engaging and craftily worded. Both suspenseful and confusing. The "magic beans" scheme sounded interesting. The description and cost of each and every item of clothing seemed unnecessary, but did prove a point. I liked it.


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1 JD_Renaissance 5 years, 8 months ago Reply

It almost seemed as if you were describing your character's death - how in death all worldly possessions were stripped away leaving the stark reality of who he really was - and then the character, furious for being put in that position, returned to his body, alive but damaged inside and out.

Whether this is what you intended or not, I liked it. Well done.


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1 honeygloom 5 years, 8 months ago Reply

I love how open to interpretation you left this. Thinking about it is as rewarding as reading it. Great job Jack:)


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