Discussion of "Renaissance: Treading – Day 331, Noon" by JD_Renaissance

I'll save comments until you've published, if that's okay. So far...me likey. I only hope you don't end it here.

I wasn't sure if this was too much tell and not enough show. Which is why I left it as a draft for so long. I think if I had more time I would write out the scenes of her catching him as he made his rounds, etc. Maybe when I go to revise it I'll do that. In the mean time, I've decided to publish as is and move on to the next. On SM I feel I have to keep the pace going a bit quicker than if this were a novel. What do you think?

And no worries about ending it here. There's much more left to the story. :)

Another great chapter, JD. I disagree about to much tell and not enough show. I thought it the right balance.

Writing on SM is surely a unique challenge. You have to keep the pace quick and the interest high or lose your audience to one of the many chapters posted each day/week. Of course, that's usually the case with short stories, no matter where you're writing. For that reason, though, I think it great practice for novel writing. If I lose interest in a novel, because one or more chapters bog down, I'll think twice before buying a book by that author again.

When I write here, it's almost always fast, most times "from the hip". I don't spend any time worrying about what I'm writing and I just let it flow. If a story is well read and "accepted" by those I greatly respect, here; I will try to incorporate that "feeling" into my novel. I know already that I worry too much when working on the novel...I'm too serious and the prose (on proofread) seems stilted, sometimes. Fortunately, there's re-writes that enable me to go back and "lighten" up and speed up...lol.

Thanks, Wwb. I'm glad that the show vs tell ratio had the right balance. It is such a difficult balance to maintain sometimes. I'm also glad I haven't lost your interest with this story.

I know how you feel about pacing a novel and trying to get every scene and every chapter and paragraph and sentence perfect and then just letting go and lightening up. I seem to do my best work when I don't really think about what I'm writing and just let it flow from me. Which is probably why editing and revisions - the current stage I'm in with my novel - are taking soooooo long. Ugh. :)

I loved the rubber band thing, escepially how she was able to show him. I also am really glad about Marshall's favorite words. Not what they mean but how they sound. Kinda of like 'goop' for me! LOL

I wasn't quite sure about the rubber band part and am glad it worked out so well.

I might have to teach Marshal the word goop now. :D Thanks, Dkk!