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Discussion of "Renaissance: Surge" by JD_Renaissance


2 Aggeloi 4 years, 10 months ago Reply

I rarely give out fives. But that's exactly what I rated this chapter.

Your pacing was creepily spot on. And you've captured human nature to a T. Beautiful!


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1 JD_Renaissance 4 years, 10 months ago Reply

Hurray! Thank you!


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3 dkk4510 4 years, 10 months ago Reply

In the first sentence, and I'm suprised Aggeloi didn't say anything, but there should be a comma between for and the.

Besides that, wonderfully writen and a captivating read! This story isn't losing focus nor satainability(not sure if I spelled that right) at all. Next...


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1 JD_Renaissance 4 years, 10 months ago Reply

Thanks for the catch on the first sentence.

Not sure about spelling either. But I get the idea. Thanks, Dkk.


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3 writerwannabe 4 years, 10 months ago Reply

Dang! I only squeezed in a few minutes of SM on Saturday morning, didn't see any new chapters; busy with other stuff until now - Monday morning, and I feel like I've awakened to an overnight blizzard...
lol. Lots of catching up to do -

I really like these little interludes and this one in particular. It's almost like an old story teller, sitting on a tree stump, surrounded by a group of listeners. He's taken them for a run, sees they need to rest and then, deciding they've had enough rest- drops a cliffhanger at the end of the interlude, instantly increasing everyone's blood pressure - "Oh my, what was that?", before launching into another dash forward!

I love it!


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1 JD_Renaissance 4 years, 10 months ago Reply

Thanks, WWB


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2 LadyLuck 4 years, 10 months ago Reply

Wow... all I can say.


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1 JD_Renaissance 4 years, 9 months ago Reply

:D


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