Discussion of "Renaissance: Treading – Day 345, Evening" by JD_Renaissance

Time will tell indeed.

:D

Fabulous chapter, JD. Although I felt you jumped into this debate rather quickly, as mentioned in a previous comment, you've got to keep the pace high here on SM. I imagine that in your re-write for the novel this chapter will come after a few chapters of Norman building up his arguments and alliances, secretly, before bursting out in front of the entire camp.

Aside from that..this chapter was truly well done. Renni's speech was excellent, in particular pulling off her robotic leg and using that as an argument against Norman...;o)

I agree that I rushed into this confrontation. At the same time, I also know that if I slowed down and showed the scenes of her watching him, their verbal battles escalating, etc., then it would've dragged the story down too much and taken too long to get back to the fast paced action. However, I do hope that this initial rushing won't detract from their continuing animosity. I'm glad you liked Renni's speech and her using her leg. Gruesome but effective, I thought.