Discussion of "Summoned - Two (Present)" by JD_Renaissance

Is this the same story? LOL. Of course, it is and I know it'll become clear somewhere.. somehow...;o)

Several grammar errors, primarily misspelling but, not my bag...just a suggestion to give it another proofread.

Wow. You continue to amaze me with impeccable attention to detail, ever increasing tension and character building. As with your Renaissance story, I'm literally bouncing in my chair, wanting to read more!

Yeah, it's the same story. I had a hard time starting this one. I wanted to start with the tunnel but found the chapter kept getting too cluttered with back story - the argument at the beginning of it all and what followed. So, I decided to take a chance and do parallel stories about the same girl - past and present separated by one year.

As per your suggestion, I did a read through and fixed a couple of rough sentences, a wrong word usage, and some grammatical errors. However, I probably didn't catch everything - probably missed everything you caught and fixed everything that you didn't. :) Anyways, thanks for the suggestion to go back over it. Thanks to Al, I'm getting more into the habit of letting a story percolate in draft form before publishing it. If only I'd done that with Renni's story.

Thanks for the praise! I'll probably publish this tomorrow and will post the next chapter as a draft then. This is just a story stuck in my head and though I have some idea of where I want it to go, this is the first time I'm doing a series of chapters without a definite structure. A bit scary really. :)

I'm looking forward to the next chapter...;o)

I discovered why I was having problems finishing up my novel. It was because I was trying to stick to the outline I had in my head and on paper. Now, I'm working each chapter "without a definite structure"...lol. Scary - no; fun - lots and lots!