shandinah,

Yeah, I realize that Maribel was very out of caracter, now that I've published it. I know a that if I would've changed just a few details, it would have been better. I hate reading a bunch of typos and bad punctuation errors, so I usually try a lot harder than necessary to prevent. I'm glad you noticed that.

Yeah, I know I could've done better, wolfram. I was in a hurry and didn't spend much time editing. You propose a good point on Lockley and him being just bored, I tried going for the urge to do it, but there wasn't anything to tell him to make the clones. If I could've entered more than one chapter I think I would've done better. Well,. thnx for the comment. Thank you for the comment, I've been waiting to get someone's opinion who is not my friend or related to me. It helps to get a view with both the bad and the good things about it.

You did good, Cheese. I thought your chapter was better than mine. I haven't read any other chapters yet, but I'm glad I waited till I published mine to go and read other peoples chapters. Well done and good luck.

Good sight and all, but I'd like to be able to edit my chapters after I've published them. I want to keep making the whole thing better till it's perfect, but I still want people to read it as soon as possible.