Discussion of "Christmas in the Bahamas" by Hudson1

This story set out with a lot of potential. There is a situation- a grandfather with cancer, two somewhat unhinged kids, the background of war, a chracter looking back on his life and decisions. But you don't really make use of this. The ending is ok but you could've done much more with this setup.

Thanks for your input. I wrote the story in a writing workshop, where we had picture prompts, first a setting(a man looking at a boat) and then a character(a lady dressed in a Santa suit) and I thought it kind of took an undpredictable spin, but apparently you felt the first part worked better. I appreciate your feedback. I wish more people would write comments, as it helps me as a writer!