Discussion of "October Chill: The Message (4): For a Piece to Cross Me Over" by Houlgrave

Not bad Houl...The sermon was amazing. Just wish you would have elaborated more. I know how it feels to rush because of time, also to just want to put your thoughts down and write...Thanks for giving him a name. Peter's **** ran out of there scared shitless. I give you a 3 for this, only because of the shortness of the content. You left a good finish for someone else to mash.

Excellent writing, houlgrave! I, too, was a little dismayed by the brevity of this chapter, but it did move the story forward, left off for a good mash and, typically for you, superior writing skills.
4 points.

I loved this chapter Houl. I thought it finally gave the story a more defined purpose. Now we have a better understanding of what’s up. yet, there is still wiggle room for someone to do some creative elaborating. And also finally we have a name! Peter.
I cant believe we made it through five chapters, including the original, and we just now learn our main characters name. Last chapter we learned the sons name was Trevor. We still do not know the daughter or wife…right? Unless I overlooked something.
I gave this a five.

Hey Houl, I never commented on this one, sorry about that. I loved it though. The Preacher's sermon was spectacular. Very believable and totally spine chilling!

Houl your up for "I have 30 days to live." Come on and serve us your dish. Don't linger too long.....