Discussion of "October Chill: Feasting From Afar" by Houlgrave

Creepy! nice set up too.

Excellent writing, Houlgrave! Great description, great character building and most excellent leave for the next guy/gal...lol. One thing threw me off. I didn't get the impression from the original chapter that Peter was an old guy. Rather, his wife and children (young children) had died recently (a year, maybe two before)so, Peter would be, at most mid to late thirties. Maybe it's just me....I missed something. Anyway, great job!!!

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I gave the impression he was an old guy? How so?

"I was surprised to recognize an old high school acquaintance among the bunch; old, grizzled, a man who had always bragged about his exploits at Saigon during the War after lecturing us on Shakespeare: Lt. General Jonathan Treize." This is what threw me, but now, after reading again I see that he must have been one of Peter's teachers? Sorry!

"Drunk already." That set the stage for me - that and the parking space, and the old guys not paying attention - like everything is out of his control. Great job!

YOUR NEXT CHAPTER IS DUE TOMORROW

Great continuation - you really brought him to life. The 'lights out' ending was a nice surprise and an excellent leave.

Very well written. I enjoy your work Houlgrave...

Houlgrave, this was spectacular. My overwhelming apologies for not reading it sooner. As I am now on the hook for this chapter I am just getting around to reading the entire storyline.
Aside from MARY, I believe this to be my favorite first chapter in this MASH. I love your style. You’re crafty with words, fabulously creative and you have a very descriptive flow to your writing. The ending was just brilliant.
Couldn’t consider anything but a five.