Discussion of "The Girl in the Yellow Jacket" by Hooladoff

I noticed a few grammar errors in the story. Nothing major though . I like how the story is set in a modern day. It also has a practical character that is a taxi driver. That was a cool thing to have in a story because people try to make the protagonist impractical in small ways so it was nice to see a change of pace. I have to say though I feel like there could of been a lot more emotion about the loss of the girl. Maybe a little bit more inner turmoil how he regrets hitting the truck etc.. Over all I rate it a 3.5 for an average story .

Ahaha, whoops. But thank you :)

Your welcome , you are a really good author :)

Thanks :)

Great story, Here her ghost was taking the ride.

Thank you :)

Awwwww, so sad :(