I couldnt agree with you more. In fact, I believe it is mainly our conscious thought process that blocks the potential we hold.

Thank you very much, I actually agree with you.. I was rushed towards the end and I left out some very colorful emotions that my cortex wanted to express, but.. what can ya do?? I am very impulsive and publish all my work as soon as I type the last word. Thanks for the praise!

Sometimes its best to start with a title that feels enigmatic and purposeful... one that gives you a feeling in your gut like its going to go somewhere.. then just.. start typing. Sometimes thinking can taint a pure direct line from the subconscious.

I shall, my friend. I find it funny that I stated that I would start it off, then left before finishing the next chapter lol.

hehe in this application, I pronounced "imagery" as "ihh-muh-juh-ree". So yes I pronounced it at its most literal to get that extra syllable lol :P

and dont take the haikus too literally, Im not sure why I created a second chapter to a story I began just to bitch lol! I dont think I was all the way sober either hehe, but I agree with you to some extent, but there are many physical locations with a very low concentration. Thank goodness for the internet!

hey thanks you two, dogdeity how are you? Yeah it has been a good while since I have had a few straight hours to devote to a new essay(mine really are more essays than stories lol). I checked out a few of your new ones, and a couple old ones I didnt check out before. Hopefully I can go in and read em all and leave some comments here soon.. your stories are definitely supreme, my friend
Its great to hear about the new features storymash is launching! I love the new beta story tree.

This is an absolutely wonderful critique, thank you very much for your time and input. I was thinking the same thing that you mentioned in your second paragraph as I was writing it. My stories really are essays, there are no doubts about it. In fact, I use this site as an outlet for my subconscious, that can be readily critiqued by random people. This essay went in a different direction than the beginning chapter. It is pretty much my own personal point of view, straight from my subconscious thought process. With a little help from wherever else this **** streams from. As the words flowed from my fingers I would sometimes pause and take a couple minutes to comprehend what I just typed, then decide whether I should simplify it or not. I decided that the original terminology would be the best, or I would just be like the authors of the bible, changing words around to say what I think they should mean. The only beautiful thing about this essay is the fact that I DIDNT think about it. At all..
To be honest, there is no reason at all why Volume One should not preclude Schizophrenia, except for the fact that one was written first. I prefer to retain a very eclectic and random style, it seems the most honest and unabridged.
The pretentious technical jargon overkill wasnt intentioned, it is just the way my subconscious expressed the message to my fingers.
Thank you so much for the criticism!

hehe I liked the last part :P But I really appreciate the criticism. You are partially correct: This story started out as the concept of an infinite void, I just sat down and started typing. When I was done, I went back and corrected my punctuation, and then published it immediately.
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I am rather impulsive with my writing, and thats kind of how I like it. If I can get great criticism like this from something that comes directly out of my subconscious, then I can more accurately tweak my skills so that it comes out exactly how I want it to the first time. I am a huge Thompson fan, and I think his Gonzo style is brilliant, partially because it is very similar to how my own inner narrative works.
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However you are still correct, the entire chapter was very stark and devoid of description. Maybe it was because I only took about an hour and a half with it(albeit a distracted hour and a half), or maybe it started out as a way to convey the desolation that the fetus felt during the beginning majority of the pregnancy. Or maybe its a mixture of both.
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Or maybe I just suck :P lol but thank you very very much for your comments. I actually began on the next chapter earlier today at work, and I definitely took a much more descriptive and "flavorful" route. Unfortunately it all got erased about 800 words into it, so I gotta start all over again.

Do people really do this?? How sad. Ive only been here a few days but I may have already seen evidence of that in my two chapters. There definitely seems to be a downward trend that signifies something like this.
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I did happen to find this site looking for some way to make money writing, and the idea of such is what attracted me to it and caused me to sign up. HOWEVER.. I would not have joined in the first place if I didnt take the art of words seriously. To judge on any kind of bias is just immoral, but to bring others down regardless of your opinion just to bring yourself up is disgusting.
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I, too, agree with the idea of not only requiring a comment and a reason for voting, but maybe some IP logging as well. All votes should be viewable by everybody.
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I refuse to let this hiccup stop me, however, because more important than the money to me is having an outlet for these words that take up so much bandwidth in my brain. Eventually this problem will in part take care of itself, and the rest should me taken care of by moderatorship.
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Keep on keepin on all you true writers, and let the imposters and cheaters fall through the cracks.
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Even over the internet, fakeness is transparent and easy to point out.

*IGNORE THAT LAST ONE*

About 12 lines in, I decided to start reading it as if Hunter S. Thompson himself were narrating in his Gonzo style. I am not sure what made me do it, but it fit wonderfully, and I was tickled to see the mention about 2/3 of the way in! I also loved the R. Jordan reference lol
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Anyway I figured there would be one of these, but Im pleased to see it done so magnificently. Nice work!