Yes it does, thanks a lot. I guess it really does make sense to put a bit more action in there, I'll keep that in mind.

Hey guys, thanks for the fast ranking, can I just ask for a bit help. While giving votes can you please put in some comments as well on what you think, what you like or dislike so I can improve it in the future. Thank you.

Cheers,
Ilian

Interesting I have to add, not what I had in mind but it would definitely bring me pleasure to continue what you guys have started.
Kind regards,
Ilian

well mayday8281 you`re right .. the couple of lines I wrote can be interpreted in many different way so let's see what will come up next :D

Just a side note ...
"The last thing I remember was me shouting at my dad and it all went pitch black from there. When I opened my eyes I was standing here ... on the edge of the terrace or maybe on the edge of insanity?"
For my father being dead for a couple of months ... I must have had one hell of a blank spot in my memories... but still nice continuation
Regards