Discussion of "House of Cards" by Earl_the_Grey

A very good story. I enjoyed reading it. Worthy of a few votes more than normal.

I like this chapter. It speaks volumes. One can almost see the dreaded Horizon engaging their little vessel like some Klingon bird of prey. The release of tension and fear on the eve of battle was captured well. I look forward to reading the battle to come.

Oh hell yea! Best new chapter I've read on SM since I dropped back in! This is what you call a starter chapter with loads of mash potential. This has a place to go, and characters to take them there.
Your flow was fantastic. No overuse of pronouns, and plenty gilded thought sequence. Really, truly solid writing.
5 vote from me.

Yay! I'm so glad I recommended two good ones!!

Welcome to SM!

Certainly, as crystalfoo mentioned, this is one of the best new chapters I've read on SM since dropping back in, too...lol.

Very clean word flow, great opening in character development and a story that instantly dragged me in.

This is writing!

Hmm. Love the hive mentality of the crew, though it's a bit disconcerting to see their king bee sacrificing his authority to join the fray. Soldiers are most dangerous when they know they're already dead.

At first, I thought it was an orgy. Different kind o' ship, I suppose. Though the night's still early. And merriment involves more than eating and drinking, for tomorrow they die.

Sci-fi can be a tricky genre, but you pace and word it well. Enthused and curious to see where it leads: how August gets fleshed out, what innovations the sci brings, and the variety of conflicts - on the ship, vs. the Horizon, internal. Good stuff. Keep it up.

Thanks guys for the comments and support, it's much appreciated. I'm not sure about writing another chapter for this in the near future, since a battle scene seems like it would be way to straightforward to make for meaningful reading, but it would be fun as hell to write. In the meantime, feel free to mash away! It'd be interesting to see which direction the story is taken in.