I like this one. Some of your rhymes were a bit of a streach. like comply, fry and cove, dove...but it works.

I almost really like this one..the emoticon was unnessary, but hey, the internet generation and all that. "thy" always annoys me too. Besides that great imagrey.

Flowed well, I'll definitly give you that. I personally don't care for the imagry you paint, but thats just my problem.

Loved the imagery, very creepy. I though it worked well, story flowed and was easy to read. Well, not really a story, but a great scene! I would love to see this fleshed out...

Hey everyone, I'm Disko. Love the site so far, really getting into it. I posted a few things, let me know what you think.

Can't wait to mash random ideas with you.

Great little one piece. Loved it!

I read the whole thing, my head hurts now. Thanks.

At least hit enter once or twice, give my eyes a dman break.

Anyways, all I got out of it was your life is extra sucky, you don't know how to deal and your going to keep mucking it all up because now your an emotional basketcase and you don't know any better.

Kind of tragic, hard to muster up any real sympathy with this blasted headache.

You could stop playing the victim and do something more, but hey, the emo trip is still the in thing somewhere right?

Good luck crazy cat, hope you learn to enjoy the rest of the trip!

Always good DI, way to channel your version of Lovecraft.